ONE SALT SEA
He was nine today, nine and breathless with anticipation.
The ground was cracked and dry beneath his feet, and sand
swirled around his face. The wind brushing against his skin was harsh and
gritty, and he pressed his face to the violet silk of his mother’s shawl. Her
kohl-rimmed eyes were fixed on the distance, at a rising fort of brown sand and
caked dirt.
“Just a little longer,” she said, mussing his hair, pulling
him close. Her lips were dry from the heat, like his, and he wondered if her
throat was as parched as his- his was sandpapery and hot.
To either side, salt-embrittled boats lay on ground that had
once known water intimately. They were still moored, tall poles sticking into
the ground like anchors on a sandy sea.
“This was a river once,” his mother said, her voice wistful
and scratchy from disuse. They didn’t speak unless it was necessary, their
throats were raw without water, and speaking made it worse. “Water everywhere,
beautiful clear water, sweet as anything.”
Sweet water? The only water he knew was brackish, salty, and
it came from hosepipes out of trucks. Sometimes the tanks leaked and water
sprayed from the trucks as they moved from village to village. If it wasn’t too
hot, the children would run behind the truck, screaming and laughing as the
spray doused them head to foot. Yesterday, a similar truck had rolled slowly past
his home, but he’d been too busy with the men in the village, burying his
father.
He understood death, had understood it intimately since he’d
been six and the last wells and ponds had run dry. All his little brothers and
sisters had perished, and so had a hundred children in all the little villages
that surrounded his. And then the adults had started to give up.
The fort was looming closer now; dark hieroglyphs on its
walls were the villagers had scrawled unanswered prayers. Shadows of tiny
insects and lizards skittered across its walls, distorted by the angle of the
sun into monstrosities. His mother ascended a few tall stairs and held out her
hand, her skin dry and hanging from the bones but still beautiful with her long
tapered fingers and shiny, shapely nails. He clambered up, and thus they went,
all the way up the stairs and into an open courtyard bounded by crumbling
walls.
“Look,” she said, running towards the walls, her voice a
wistful kite rising high, higher. “Look! Look at the sea!”
And he followed after her, tiny feet pattering against the
century old brick and stone, drawn by the sound of his mother’s voice, the new
clear soprano ring of it.
“Look!” she said, again, salt tears running down her skin
and leaving glistening tracks through the grime.
And there it was- the sea. So much water, rolling forever
into the distance, smashing against the foundations of the fort. Relentlessly
whipping the stone, weathering it slowly down, frothing against the boulders
lying half-submerged where parts of the fort had crumbled.
Water. Water; he had never imagined there would be so much
of it, so much of it in a world where drought reigned supreme.
“It’s all salt,” his mother said, her tears adding salt to
the sea. “It’s all salt and no use. No life, no life in it.”
She climbed atop the walls and stared down into the sea, the
sun glistening on the water, reflecting off her eyes.
His eyes were wide with the discovery of the sea. Her violet
shawl fluttered in the wind and whipped against his face. He climbed up beside
her, and the sun was so hot. His throat was so dry. There was no moisture in
the air. Time was dry as a desert, each second enclosing within itself a
parched eternity.
“Wouldn’t you like to feel it? The sea? All that water…,”
his mother said, her eyes glittering coins, too unreadable, too impassioned.
He swallowed, it hurt
to swallow; he looked at her again, and now she turned to him, and he didn’t
know what to say. Perhaps he should nod, but it was so high up here, and in
which direction would they swim? There was nowhere to swim. Maybe the mermaids
would adopt them, like in her stories.
“Would you like that? The water? The sea?”
The ruthless sun slowly sank into the one salt
sea, as he gazed at her in frantic surmise.
7 comments:
I came to reciprocate, I stayed to admire. What a great piece of descriptive writing. My own throat feels dry after reading that. I shall join your followers, as you have joined mine, and anticipate with pleasure your excellent prose.
As usual your capacity to to create vivid imagery blows me away..
and the story is to my taste as well..
well done :)
And I'm complaining about our drought; nothing in comparison to this story.
The sadness of this story was in my anticipation of her intent in going to the sea. I felt that their situation was so hopeless she was going to choose to end it all by drowning in the sea. After a lifetime of deprivation need they would sink into the abundant water and join the mermaids she had told him about. Great story!
Raw, intense, powerfully written, not a dry eye remaining here either. All that water, yet not a drop to drink. The bitter ironies of life!
@altonian: Thank you so much for following. It's a pleasure to know you enjoyed the tale.
@Kay: Oh, I loved your poem- you're not allowed to say that! :)
@OldEgg: When I started writing, the bright-eyed mother leading her trusting son to his death was the idea; halfway through I just couldn't bring myself to do it, and I chose to end it in ambiguity.
@Josie: yes, indeed. God made the sea, but filled it with salt. Makes you wonder @ the strangeness of it all, doesn't it?
wow ... that was sad but beautiful in its own way, i really like your writing style too! all i can say right now is well done!
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